One of the most dangerous problems in our society is pollution . People in Egypt can face different types of pollution like water pollution , noise pollution,car exhaustand so on.The most dangerous type in Egypt is water pollution.
Water pollution (Nile pollution) is caused by throwing rubbish of people and factories in the Nile also the poisons of factories ,sewage and waste water ; domestic households,industrial and agricultural practices produce waste water that can cause pollution of many lakes and rivers.Sewage is the term used for waste water that often contains Urine and laundry waste.
Water pollution affects our life badly ,for example the most dangerous diseases came from water pollution also the death of water creatures.
There must be solutions for this problem, in my opinion the country should ban people from throwing rubbish and waste materials in the water ,it also construct factories away from water resourses and raise the awareness of people about the importance of water in our life .Water pollution is abig problem and we should do our best to decrease the amount of this problem.
Water pollution (Nile pollution) is caused by throwing rubbish of people and factories in the Nile also the poisons of factories ,sewage and waste water ; domestic households,industrial and agricultural practices produce waste water that can cause pollution of many lakes and rivers.Sewage is the term used for waste water that often contains Urine and laundry waste.
Water pollution affects our life badly ,for example the most dangerous diseases came from water pollution also the death of water creatures.
There must be solutions for this problem, in my opinion the country should ban people from throwing rubbish and waste materials in the water ,it also construct factories away from water resourses and raise the awareness of people about the importance of water in our life .Water pollution is abig problem and we should do our best to decrease the amount of this problem.
One of the most dangerous problems in our society is pollution . People in Egypt (can )face different types of pollution like(:) water pollution , noise pollution,(car exhaustand, it is not a kind of pollution )so on (etc…) . In my opinion, the most dangerous type in Egypt is water pollution.
ردحذفWater pollution (Nile pollution) is caused by throwing rubbish of people and factories in the Nile also the poisons of factories ,sewage and waste water ; domestic house holds,industrial and agricultural practices produce waste water that can cause pollution of many lakes and rivers (It is better to divide this long sentence into two sentences). Sewage is the term used for waste water that often contains Urine and laundry waste (try to mention more causes of water pollution).
Water pollution affects our life badly.( ,for example) the most dangerous diseases came from water pollution also the death of water creatures.
There must be solutions for this problem (.) in my opinion (,) the country should ban people from throwing rubbish and waste materials in the water(.) it (It) also (should)construct factories away from water resourses (wrong spelling) and raise the awareness of people about the importance of water in our life .Water pollution is abig (a big) problem and we should do our best to decrease (the amount of )this problem.
you choose avery good type of pollution but u have many syntactic mistakes which cause akind of ambiguity in your essay .Dr/samah has covered them all but there is an obvious stylisits mistake that take all my attention . iam sorry to tell you that but basiclly aparagraph is consists of four medium sentencse at least as we previouly study in the first year
ردحذفstylistic mistake
ردحذفhi hoba good essay 1.your essay has a clear purpose 2. your essay has concise main idea 3.try to revise punctuation 4.i know you puzzle in writing (resources ) so revise the spelling 5. your essay has introduction ,body and which by and large are clear 6. the more you read ,the more you write
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