-Education system is the infra-structure of any country in the world.Some countries have a very good education system and other countries their education system is not successful enough.Egypt is one of these countries in which people do not achieve any progress becouse of lack of education.
-In Egypt ,we can find many problems in education system which face learners .Firstly,low literacy rates and exploding population which reached to the increasing numbers of graduates and over crowded schools and classrooms .Secondly , educatin quality ,particularly in basic education and technical and vocational education , had seriously declined becouse of learning conducted with material drills and physical punishment . Thirdly, lack of technology and poor or absent libraries and laboratories.
-There are some suggested solutions to solve these problems.The first solution is the government should build new schools to obtain the huge numbers of graduates which resulted from over population .The second is the ministery of education should prevent teachers from using physical punishment with students.The third is the ministery should also provide schools with all means of technology especially computers and with modern laboratories and modern tools.
-Finally, education system is very important to all people in Egypt.Our country can not reach the European countries and it can not make any progress without a successful education system.
-In Egypt ,we can find many problems in education system which face learners .Firstly,low literacy rates and exploding population which reached to the increasing numbers of graduates and over crowded schools and classrooms .Secondly , educatin quality ,particularly in basic education and technical and vocational education , had seriously declined becouse of learning conducted with material drills and physical punishment . Thirdly, lack of technology and poor or absent libraries and laboratories.
-There are some suggested solutions to solve these problems.The first solution is the government should build new schools to obtain the huge numbers of graduates which resulted from over population .The second is the ministery of education should prevent teachers from using physical punishment with students.The third is the ministery should also provide schools with all means of technology especially computers and with modern laboratories and modern tools.
-Finally, education system is very important to all people in Egypt.Our country can not reach the European countries and it can not make any progress without a successful education system.
Your draft is good and well developed but take care of:
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2.we can find many problems in education system which face learners .(we can find many problems facing students in the educational system)
3. Firstly,low literacy rates and exploding population which reached to the increasing numbers of graduates and over crowded schools and classrooms .(divide it into sentences because it carries different meanings)
4., lack of technology and (and/or) poor (or) absent libraries and laboratories.
5. The first solution is (that) the government should build new schools
6. with all means of technology especially computers and (with) modern laboratories and modern tools.
your essay is very good and is well_organised . you have definite introduction body and conclusion . your purpose is clear .but you have some articles and spelling .
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